The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagrams illustrate
that
how Correct word choice
apply
the
Grange Park changed since it Correct article usage
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built
in 1920 and now.
Add a missing verb
was built
Overall
, it is clear that
everything has changed except two entrances to Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street and the top-left rose garden
.
To begin
with Correct article usage
the left-hand-side
left-hand-side
and centre of the map, the middle fountain was replaced by a square rose Correct your spelling
left-hand side
garden
which surrounded
by a new seat around the place. On the left-hand side of the map, a new huge amphitheatre for concerts was built Add a missing verb
was surrounded
instead
of an old stage for musicians. Meanwhile, the rose garden
and seats which are located at the bottom of the map in 1920 were removed.
Turning to the right-hand side of the park, an old garden
and a pond were knocked down and two new facilities were established as a café and children’s playground. It made that area more modernized than previous
version. Change the article
the previous
Moreover
, a long glasshouse turned into a beautiful and enormous water feature. Lastly
, seats were
disappeared and a new entrance for underground parking was constructed.Unnecessary verb
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words garden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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