The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagrams illustrate
that
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how
the
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Grange Park changed since it
built
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in 1920 and now.
Overall
,
it is clear that
everything has changed except two entrances to Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street and the top-left rose
garden
.
To begin
with
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the left-hand-side
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left-hand-side
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and centre of the map, the middle fountain was replaced by a square rose
garden
which
surrounded
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by a new seat around the place. On the left-hand side of the map, a new huge amphitheatre for concerts was built
instead
of an old stage for musicians. Meanwhile, the rose
garden
and seats which are located at the bottom of the map in 1920 were removed. Turning to the right-hand side of the park, an old
garden
and a pond were knocked down and two new facilities were established as a café and children’s playground. It made that area more modernized than
previous
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version.
Moreover
, a long glasshouse turned into a beautiful and enormous water feature.
Lastly
, seats
were
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disappeared and a new entrance for underground parking was constructed.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words garden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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