The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The chart illustrates the level of regular physical activity
according to
sex and age
groups in Australia in 2010.
First,
in Australia, approximately four in ten people did regular sport
Change the noun form
sports
activities
during their lives as of age
15 and over. In the youngest group, people from 15 to 24 years old, females were
accounted for 47.7% only, Unnecessary verb
apply
whereas
males
presented peak
of 52.8%. In stark contrast, growing up women became more active and improved Add an article
a peak
amount
of regular physical Correct pronoun usage
their amount
activities
from age
25 and more, peaked
around Wrong verb form
peaking
45
-54 years old category with 53.3%, Correct article usage
the 45
while
males
decreased gradually until the age
of 35 to 44 and then
slightly recovered. People above 65 were sharing
roughly the same parameters, 46.7 and 47.1 for Wrong verb form
shared
males
and females respectively.
Secondly
, the biggest disproportion was observed in the age
group of 35 to 44, when share
of Add an article
the share
a share
males
who were doing regular physical activities
achieved the bottom of 39.5%, while
females accounted for 52.5, which is 12% more, compared to males
.
Overall
, in terms of doing regular sport
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sports
activities
adult women were more active than men, while
among the youth men were led.Submitted by vikiregev on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, activities, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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