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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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pie graphs illustrate data about the rate of the four different types of transportation used in the British in 1996,1985 and 2005.
Overall
, it can be easily seen that private cars are the most popular and the proportion of the using
privete
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private
 cars slightly increased from 1965 to 1985 and 1986 to 2005 by 15% and 5% respectively. It is observed that the rate of recreational vehicles fluctuated.
Fistly
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Firstly
, there was a remarkable decline(10%) between
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 20 years
then
 there was a minimal growth( 3%) in the second period.
Moreover
, in 1965 and in 1985 the lorries and
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other types
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 of
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transportation
transportation's
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 exactly the same
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 20% and it
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 by a significant fall in 2005 by half of 20%.
However
, the preferences
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 public transport
almost
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same
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while
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 went up and down in the given period.
To sum up
,
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private cars and public
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transport
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 top of the list compared
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 other
type
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 of transportation
vechils
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vehicles
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 the given
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