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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The given diagrams illustrate the plan for the university's sports centre and how it will change after the reconstruction
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, it can be seen that
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 centre has undergone a number of significant changes. The point worth considering is that there will be more convenient facilities and the development of
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 outdoor courts. Looking at the first map, there is a large building with
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 outdoor streets to both the western and eastern areas. In the building, there is a reception, which is placed opposite the entrance and in front of a 25 m swimming pool.
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, the changing room is placed to the left of the pool
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 the other side is the seating and
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 the gym at the back Turning to the second map, there will be
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 outdoor streets that will be attached to the building,
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plethora of facilities
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 built. Specifically, a large leisure pool will be constructed on western courts. On the other street, a sports hall and
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 dance studios are likely to be built.
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, that will have
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 changing rooms, one cafe and a sports shop in the future. In the plans, the gym will be expanded, its size may be as
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 times as the present.
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coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, each paragraph should focus on a single main idea. For example, one paragraph could be dedicated to the current layout, and another to the future developments.
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Ensure that all key features of both maps are described clearly and compare these features to show changes effectively.
coherence cohesion
It's important to use varied sentence structures and avoid repetition of words where possible. This will make your writing more engaging.
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The essay provides a clear overview of the main changes that will happen to the sports centre after redevelopment.
coherence cohesion
The use of directional language (e.g., 'western', 'eastern') adds clarity to the description.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • redevelopment
  • expansion
  • modern amenities
  • recreational activities
  • cater
  • enhancement
  • aesthetics
  • accommodate
  • upgraded
  • welcoming
  • significantly expanded
  • current layout
  • future layout
  • gym enthusiasts
  • modernized
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