The line graph illustrates the average monthly change in price of 3 metals in 2014

The line graph illustrates the average monthly change in price of 3 metals in 2014
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph illustrates the average monthly change in price of 3 metals in 2014
Contained in the line graph is data pertaining to the alteration in
monthly
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the monthly
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price of 3 different types of metal throughout the year 2014
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, the conversion in the cost of
nickel
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and
copper
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witnessed a downward trajectory over the surveyed period,
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the opposite was true for that of zinc. Notably, the most significant volatility can be seen in the figure for
nickel
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. Looking at the first half of the year, it is apparent that the change
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price
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the price
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of
nickel
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fell significantly from exactly 6% to 1% during the first three months before hitting a trough at precisely -3% in June,
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there was a gradual decline of
approxiamtely
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approximately
1,5% in that of
copper
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.
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, the figure for zinc started at exactly 1% in January. It
then
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increased rapidly to exactly 3% in February prior to plummeting to -3% in June. Turning to the second half of the year, despite some fluctuations, both figures for
nickel
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and zinc experienced a swift rise to exactly 2% and 1% between June and December,
repectively
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respectively
. Meanwhile, the conversion in price of
copper
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grew moderately to precisely 1% in July.
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this
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,
copper
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remained unchanged at 1% in the next 3 months before decreasing to approximately 0,5% in December.
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, the figure rebounded to roughly 1,5%
at the end
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of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, copper with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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