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The bar graph indicates tje average amount of water used by different household appliances each day in the US. The table shows how many gallons of water were consumed oer oersin in the US over a 25-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting themain features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph indicates tje average amount of water used by different household appliances each day in the US. The table shows how many gallons of water were consumed oer oersin in the US over a 25-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting themain features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram provided data on the information about daily
water
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 consumed by electric appliances by families per
day
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 in the US.
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,
table
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the table
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illastrated
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illustrated
illustrates
 how much
water
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 an individual uses per
day
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 from 1985 to 2010. The diagram reveals a clear relationship between electric materials and
gallons
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 per
day
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. The largest part of consumed
water
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 is the toilet around 30
gallons
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 per
day
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. It can seen that from
this
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 diagram Shower, Faucet, and Washing Machine have similar values
about
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of about
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 25
gallons
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 and
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the Diswasher
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Diswasher
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dishwasher
, Bath and
Other
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Others
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 have the
leastest
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least
lastest
number
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numbers
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 under 5
gallons
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.
It is clear that
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 from
this
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 table,
Water
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 use has continued to increase with advancing age from 98
gallons
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 in 1985 to
110gallons
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110 gallons
 in 2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, day, gallons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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