Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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people only live once, you need to try to do more things. When you always
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in one town or city all your life,you will hard to get more upper chance to see or learn from the world.
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think people need to move from one place to another.
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task achievement
Expand your arguments with specific examples and reasons. Mention why moving can provide better opportunities and experiences.
coherence cohesion
Develop a clear introduction and conclusion to structure your essay. Start with a clear thesis statement and end with a summarizing conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Work on linking your ideas together more smoothly. Use transitions and connectors to show how your ideas are related.
task achievement
Your opinion is clearly stated, showing that you disagree with the statement.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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