Art classes such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The progression of a child
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a range of aspects
such
as logic and
creativity
. It is said that it is compulsory for high
schools
to open
art
classes
for
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juvenile
juveniles
as it is vital to their development
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to other
subjects
.
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author
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agree
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with the statement
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because of
the important role of
art
in encouraging
creativity
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the creativity
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of children and its connection with other
subjects
. it is evident that the evolution of a child's brain cannot be done without
art
.
In other words
, the ability of creation is trained
through out
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art
classes
.
therefore
by attending painting or drawing
classes
children can completely develop their
brain
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besides
many other core
subjects
.
Thus
, apart from compulsory courses,
art
classes
are crucial to a child's development. it is
also
important to know that there is a strong bond between
art
and other
subjects
in
schools
.
art
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supports other
subjects
and vice versa,
creativity
and logical thinking are both required in all
subjects
and
art
helps
jurveniles
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juveniles
enhance their
creativity
and other
subjects
like maths and physics support them with improving logical thinking.
As a consequence
, children may be good at both fields of
subjects
in
shools
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schools
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and many abilities of them can be exploited in the future. So,
art
classes
are indispensable in high
schools
because of
its
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vital connection with many
others
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other
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courses. in conclusion,
art
classes
are
crucial
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as other
subjects
as
it
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they
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enhances
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creativity
and
supports
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support
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others
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courses in high
schools
.
Thus
,
this
writer believes that
art
classes
should be compulsory in high
shools
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schools
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and it is as important as many other
subjects
.
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  • enhances
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • innovatively
  • curriculum
  • mental health
  • emotional expression
  • stress relief
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • creatively
  • cultural diversity
  • artistic traditions
  • compulsory
  • well-rounded education
  • academic performance
  • concentrate
  • attention to detail
  • persevere
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