Art classes such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The progression of a child
need
Change the verb form
needs
show examples
a range of aspects
such
as logic and
creativity
. It is said that it is compulsory for high
schools
to open
art
classes
for
juvernile
Correct your spelling
juvenile
juveniles
as it is vital to their development
compares
Wrong verb form
compared
show examples
to other
subjects
.
This
author
totoally
Correct your spelling
totally
agree
Change the verb form
agrees
show examples
with the statement
becauseof
Correct your spelling
because of
the important role of
art
in encouraging
creativity
Add an article
the creativity
show examples
of children and its connection with other
subjects
. it is evident that the evolution of a child's brain cannot be done without
art
.
In other words
, the ability of creation is trained
through out
Correct your spelling
throughout
show examples
art
classes
.
therefore
by attending painting or drawing
classes
children can completely develop their
brain
Fix the agreement mistake
brains
show examples
besides
many other core
subjects
.
Thus
, apart from compulsory courses,
art
classes
are crucial to a child's development. it is
also
important to know that there is a strong bond between
art
and other
subjects
in
schools
.
art
Capitalize word
Art
show examples
supports other
subjects
and vice versa,
creativity
and logical thinking are both required in all
subjects
and
art
helps
jurveniles
Correct your spelling
juveniles
enhance their
creativity
and other
subjects
like maths and physics support them with improving logical thinking.
As a consequence
, children may be good at both fields of
subjects
in
shools
Correct your spelling
schools
show examples
and many abilities of them can be exploited in the future. So,
art
classes
are indispensable in high
schools
because of
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
show examples
vital connection with many
others
Correct quantifier usage
other
show examples
courses. in conclusion,
art
classes
are
crucial
Rephrase
as crucial
show examples
as other
subjects
as
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
show examples
enhances
Correct subject-verb agreement
enhance
show examples
creativity
and
supports
Correct subject-verb agreement
support
show examples
others
Correct quantifier usage
other
show examples
courses in high
schools
.
Thus
,
this
writer believes that
art
classes
should be compulsory in high
shools
Correct your spelling
schools
show examples
and it is as important as many other
subjects
.
Submitted by [email protected] on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

logical structure
Work on improving the logical flow between paragraphs. Sometimes the connection between ideas is not very clear. Try using more transitional phrases or sentences to link your ideas effectively.
relevant specific examples
Make sure each of your main points is supported with relevant and specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
clear comprehensive ideas
Pay attention to sentence structure, grammar, and punctuation. This will make your ideas clearer and easier to follow.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion.
complete response
You provided a comprehensive response to the task, addressing both aspects of the prompt.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • enhances
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • innovatively
  • curriculum
  • mental health
  • emotional expression
  • stress relief
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • creatively
  • cultural diversity
  • artistic traditions
  • compulsory
  • well-rounded education
  • academic performance
  • concentrate
  • attention to detail
  • persevere
What to do next:
Look at other essays: