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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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of
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 a museum’s ground floor between 1990 and 2010. After 20 years, the museum had notable modifications by adding some new facilities
such
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 as a Café, a Poster display area and a Children’s play zone,
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 some areas remained unchanged. Since 1990, a Café was built inside the Gift Shop.
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Although
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, the Archaeology gallery which was to the right of the Gift shop, was completely removed and replaced by
Children’s
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the Children’s
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 interactive play zone. Below
this
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, a Poster display area was introduced, replacing the empty space.
Moreover
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, the Reception counter that in 1990 was near the Entrance, was moved in front of the Museum’s office.
About the
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 Statue that was to the left of
stairs
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the stairs
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, in 2010 it is located in the
center
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 of the Ground floor, making it more visible
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 visitors.
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, a lift was installed near the staircase, providing easier access to other floors.
To conclude
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,
while
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 some sections of the museum remained unchanged, notable modifications were made, providing visitors with new facilities.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to include a brief overview or summary statement in the conclusion that highlights the key changes more explicitly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using more linking words and phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Task Achievement
The essay provides a clear description of the changes made to the museum's ground floor, with relevant details mentioned.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of the essay is logical, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs detailing changes, and a conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • exhibition space
  • gallery rooms
  • visitor facilities
  • accessibility
  • redesign
  • expansion
  • administrative areas
  • staff-only areas
  • gift shop
  • entrance
  • lobby area
  • restrooms
  • cafes
  • improvements
  • access areas
  • ground floor
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