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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two plans illustrate the changes a museum went through in 1990 and in 2010. From the perspective of the entrance angle, one notable alteration was the relocation of the Statue from the northern part of the area to the
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 of the floor. The remaining space was used to expand the former Gift shop, located on the top left corner of the plan, which incorporated a Café by 2010. On the opposite side, a significant change occurred in the
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Archeology
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 gallery part, which was divided into a Children’s interactive zone and a Poster display area, both overlapping the same cumulative space.
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, the area between the Café, the gift shop and the Natural history room was
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 with the installation of a lift. The Reception counter got enlarged near the Entrance. As a whole, the museum had undergone a number of major transformations from 1990 to 2010.

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task response
For task response, start with a brief overall view of how the plan changed. Then list the changes in a clear order and finish with a short wrap up. Try to keep to what the task asks and not add new details.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, use easy linking words (First, Next, Also, Then, Finally). Try to split the text into 2 or 3 short parts: intro, description by parts, and a short end. Make sure each idea connects to the next.
content
You note several changes that did happen, like the statue move and the cafe addition.
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There are some clear concrete points (lift, reception desk size) that show detail.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • exhibition space
  • gallery rooms
  • visitor facilities
  • accessibility
  • redesign
  • expansion
  • administrative areas
  • staff-only areas
  • gift shop
  • entrance
  • lobby area
  • restrooms
  • cafes
  • improvements
  • access areas
  • ground floor
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