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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two plans illustrate changes introduced from 1990 to 2010
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 Ground floor of a museum. The most striking change was done to the eastern part of the area, where the Archaeology gallery was divided into
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 interactive zone and Poster display area, though it is noticeable that the positioning and size of
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 history room remained the same. Another important modification was made
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 the Reception counter and the statue, which were repositioned: the first one was moved closer to the enlarged entrance,
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 the second was placed in the
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 of the Ground floor. At the same time, the gift shop was expanded and a café was added to it.
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 history room, which remained the same. Taken as a whole, since 1990 until 2010 the ground floor of a museum has undergone several alterations.
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coherence cohesion
To further improve coherence and cohesion, consider adding linking words or phrases. For example, use terms like 'additionally' or 'moreover' to smoothly connect ideas.
coherence cohesion
To strengthen the introduction and conclusion and enhance logical structure, consider crafting a clear introductory sentence that sets the context and a concluding sentence that sums up the changes or insights.
task achievement
The essay effectively compares the differences between 1990 and 2010, covering the main changes comprehensively.
task achievement
Specific examples, such as the division of the Archaeology gallery and repositioning of the reception, illustrate the points effectively.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure is maintained throughout the essay with a clear progression of ideas from one point to the next.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • exhibition space
  • gallery rooms
  • visitor facilities
  • accessibility
  • redesign
  • expansion
  • administrative areas
  • staff-only areas
  • gift shop
  • entrance
  • lobby area
  • restrooms
  • cafes
  • improvements
  • access areas
  • ground floor
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