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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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 graph provided data on the information about the average number of visitors from China, America, Turkey, and Brazil who
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 outdoor or indoor activities on vacation in Greece in the summer of 2019. The data reveals a clear relationship between
time
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 and countries. Chinese
tourists
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 spend most of
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time
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their time
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to read
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reading
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 books about eight
hours
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also
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, visitors from America spend the longest
time
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 around five
hours
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. By constant,
the
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apply
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Brazilian
tourists
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 and Turkish
tourists
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 spend most of
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time
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their time
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 at the beach.
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 from
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 bar chart reading books by American
tourists
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 and spending
time
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 at the beach by Turkish
visiterts
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visitors
 have same the number of
hours
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 of five
hours
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.
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,
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 is the same
time
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 spent by American and Turkish
tourists
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 to visit places and
Chinise
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Chinese
 and Brazilian
tourists
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spens
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spend
spent
spends
 the least
time
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 than
that
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those
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 two countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, tourists, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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