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Nowadays, teamwork is in fashion in the workplace and many people working with a group of people. What are the advantages and disadvantages teamwork brings to people who prefer to do so?

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At present, teamwork is essential in the
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 environment and a huge number of employees opt to do It. Working as a team is advantageous for the simple reason that it opens the door to
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 any problem and
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 the solution easily but there are
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 drawbacks to be taken into account. On the one hand, there are numerous advantages of working in a
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.
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, people can discuss their
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-related problems in a
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 and find a possible solution swiftly which means that productivity will be increased in much less time.
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, workers who
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 in a
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most
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 likely to become successful as it combines different people with a massive amount of experience.
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, with the help of experts, a company can avoid any feasible mistakes and make the right decision In order to achieve its
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 goal. A recent survey showed that three-quarters of American successful companies made it compulsory for their employee to
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 with each other in the workplace.
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, one of the major problems of
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 is a dispute among colleagues. Because not all human beings have the same attitude
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if some members of a
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 feel that their opinions are not being appreciated by others they might get agitated which could bring about animosity in the
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 environment. Another possible issue is that
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 method of working could prevent talented people
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 their potential as they have to
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 their peers.
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, they do not get the chance to enhance their creativity.
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 teamwork can be beneficial for certain individuals, it can
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 cause clashes among partners and suppress gifted ones to flourish.
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task achievement
Consider elaborating on some ideas more deeply, including more specific examples and concrete details to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph logically connects to the next to create a smoother flow of ideas for the reader, potentially using stronger transitional phrases.
coherence cohesion
Always proofread your work to catch minor grammatical errors and ensure clarity. For instance, capitalize 'It' to 'it', use 'desire' form as 'desired' when describing a goal.
structure
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, making a well-rounded argument.
task achievement
You have made relevant points about the advantages and disadvantages of teamwork, supporting them with logical reasoning.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • synergy
  • innovation
  • morale
  • perspectives
  • skill set
  • productivity
  • coordination
  • conflict resolution
  • divergent viewpoints
  • innovation
  • team dynamics
  • mutual support
  • group cohesion
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