The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they recieved from empoyers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they recieved from empoyers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The featured bar charts illustrate the proportion of different
age
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concerning
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the
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reasons
for study and the funds provided
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employers.
Overall
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, the main reason for students who
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49 years old to study is
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their career goals,
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that for those who
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49 years old is
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interest. Meanwhile, the proportion of individuals under 26 years old is
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highest
among other
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groups in financial support provided by employers. It is clear
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the graph that 80% of students under 26
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years
old go to school for their future development,
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, with
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growing up, there are fewer
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career
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a career
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as the main motivation. Those figures for 26-29, 30-39, 40-49 and 49+ are 70%, 65%, 40% and 20% respectively.
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to those who study by their interest, the tendency is different from the career. Only 10%
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people
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with
age
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under 26 go to school for interest,
while
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that figure for 49+ students is 70%.
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, as for the degree of
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by
employer
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the employer
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, 61%
employees
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of employees
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with
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aged
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age
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under 26
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need
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financial
aids
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. And there are fewer
people
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supported by
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employers
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with
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age
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ages
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between 26-39.
However
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, the percentage of suppoted
people
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tend
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tends
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to
higher
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be higher
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with individuals aged beyond 39 (35% for 40-49 and 42% for over 49).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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