The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they recieved from empoyers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they recieved from empoyers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The featured bar charts illustrate the proportion of different
age
goups
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groups
concerning
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the
resasons
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reasons
for study and the funds provided
from
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by
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employers.
Overall
, the main reason for students who
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49 years old to study is
due to
their career goals,
while
that for those who
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49 years old is
according to
interest. Meanwhile, the proportion of individuals under 26 years old is
heighest
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highest
among other
age
groups in financial support provided by employers. It is clear
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the graph that 80% of students under 26
yearls
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years
old go to school for their future development,
however
, with
age
growing up, there are fewer
people
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who consider
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career
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a career
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as the main motivation. Those figures for 26-29, 30-39, 40-49 and 49+ are 70%, 65%, 40% and 20% respectively.
In contrast
to those who study by their interest, the tendency is different from the career. Only 10%
people
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of people
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with
age
under 26 go to school for interest,
while
that figure for 49+ students is 70%.
Additionally
, as for the degree of
supported
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by
employer
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the employer
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, 61%
employees
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of employees
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with
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aged
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age
under 26
needs
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need
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financial
aids
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. And there are fewer
people
supported by
employer
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employers
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with
age
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ages
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between 26-39.
However
, the percentage of suppoted
people
tend
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tends
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to
higher
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with individuals aged beyond 39 (35% for 40-49 and 42% for over 49).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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