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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance
of
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 the provided reveals the
population
 changes of two Asian countries (namely,
India
 and China) between 2000 and now,
as well as
 the projected figures in 2050.
Overall
,
while
 the rate of the
population
 in both countries had grown significantly up until current, varied trends
has
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 shown for the subsequent decades. Increasing from approximately 1,250
billion
 in 2000 to some 1,4500
billion
 in 2020, China's
population
exceed
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India
's for over two decades, the rate
then
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 is projected to fall in 2030,
where
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 intersection and change
occured
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occur
, and is going to
plung
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plunge
 to less than 14,000 in 2050. In stark contrast,
however
, starting low at 1,000
billion
 in 2000,
India
's
population
 has shown
a
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steady growth which
also
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 evident to continue growing to 2050. By that,
India
 will have 1,600
billion
 residents.
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