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The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.
The line chart and the table
illustrates
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 the
hours
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 worked for each week and
the
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their annual salaries for the following occupations: ( Fire
services
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,
Police
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services
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,
Nurses
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 and
Teachers
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).
Overall
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, The Line graph shows that
Nurses
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 had worked the longest
hours
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comparing
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 to the other occupations. Meanwhile, the
Police
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services
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service
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 had the highest salary.
To begin
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 with,
according to
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 the line
graph
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graph,
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it is clear that
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Nurses
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 and
Fire
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the Fire
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 department worked for too many
hours
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 between roughly 40 to 55
hours
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 per week.
While
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Police
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Services
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 worked a bit less than 35
hours
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 respectively.
Teachers
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 worked the least amount of
hours
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comparing
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 to the other jobs. Looking at the table as
it
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apply
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shown,
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Police
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the Police
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 department had the highest annual salary with
the
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an
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 amount of 52,050
pounds
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. followed by the fire
services
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 with
the
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a
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 salary of 48,700
pounds
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. In
compariosn
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comparison
 to the other
jobs
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jobs,
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 we can see that
Nurses
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 and
teachers
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 had the lowest salaries
above all
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 with
the
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apply
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amount of 37,450
pounds
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 for
nurses
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 and 33,600
pounds
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 for
teachers
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, services, police, nurses, teachers, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Occupations
  • Salaries
  • Working hours
  • Average
  • Annual
  • Comparison
  • Discrepancies
  • Professions
  • Doctors
  • Teachers
  • Engineers
  • Retail workers
  • Balanced
  • High-paying
  • Low-paying
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