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The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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This
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 figure depicts the average amount of consumption
on
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of
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beverange
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beverage
beverages
 and food,
entertaitnment
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entertainment
, clothing and housing
by
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in
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 France,
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UK
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the UK
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, Germany, Turkey and Spain. It is clear from the table,
the
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that the
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 highest percentage is 37 and it was consumed in
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the UK
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UK
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the UK
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living
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.
Accourding
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According
 to what is shown,
UK
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 housing is the highest income consumed among the five countries.
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, the other aspects
such
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 as
the
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apply
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clothing and
entertaitnment
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entertainment
 are between the average, which they are 11%.
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Germeny
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Germany
spending
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spent
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 19% on
entertaining
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entertainment
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, which is the highest
propotion
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proportion
 among the countries.
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, in
clothing
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the clothing
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colour
coloum
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coloum,
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 it spent 15%. We can see from the illustration,
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 food and drinks
is
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are
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 22% and the housing is 33% which is similar to
France
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France's
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 consumption.
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, both
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Germeny
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Germany
 spent
high income
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high-income
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propotion
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proportion
in
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on
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 one aspect rather
that
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than
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 on the other aspects.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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