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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
#percentage #australian #exports #countries
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demostrates
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demonstrates
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percentage of Australian export destinations with four countries between 1990 to 2012.
Overall
, during
this
 twelve-year period, Australia remained the largest share of exports with
China
, in
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comparison
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other
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 three countries. In 1990, Australia exported the least amount of goods to India and
China
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in
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 the biggest exports made with Japan were over
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percent
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.
However
, by 2000 the exports to
China
 climbed sharply
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until
 2010
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 and reached 30
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percent
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 at
end
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 of the period. As shown in the graph, the share of Australian
export
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exports
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 experienced
a rapid downs
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 and decreased by almost 10 per cent with Japan and 
China
.
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 export
rotes
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rates
 to
US
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 fluctuated wildly, and the trend was downward.
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