El Niño is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Niño conditions.

El Niño is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Niño conditions.
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The diagrams illustrate the changing
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climates and how
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affects
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both
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side
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Pacific of
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El Nino
condition
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. The general overview is that
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el Niño causes drought on the West
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and
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lack of nutrients on the other
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.
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the normal conditions diagram, It can be seen that the East Pacific has strong trade winds, pushing the storm clouds, rains and warm
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to the opposite
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Following
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, Australia where located in the West Pacific will be rain.
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, the East Pacific has
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cooler
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from the influences of the strong winds, bringing
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high nutrients to Peru. Moving on to the El Nino conditions, It is apparent that the
strong
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of the wind is switched. The West Pacific has a stronger wind which will push the warm
water
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to the East Pacific
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, making higher
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temperature on the East
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, causing lower nutrients and more rain in Peru.
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in Australia will become draught from the lower raindrop rates on land.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words side, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trade winds
  • upwelling
  • nutrient-rich
  • marine life
  • fisheries
  • thunderstorms
  • weather patterns
  • suppress
  • coral bleaching
  • livelihoods
  • natural disasters
  • emergency response systems
  • economic stability
  • biodiversity
  • crop yields
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