The graph shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over in major developed countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over in major developed countries.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph demonstrates the levels of senior citizens
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aged 65 and over in seven of the most developed countries
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between 1950 and 2050.
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, the number of
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elderly people increased in all seven countries over
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. Despite that, Japan is predicted to have the most older citizens in 2050, compared to the rest of the six countries. Korea saw some fluctuation increase between 1950 and 1990, with nearly
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5
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before it showed
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increased
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up to 15
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in 2020 and increased
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dramatically up to approximately 35
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in 2050. China did not show much
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up to 2010 before it rose up to nearly 23
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in 2040 and relatively remained unchanged in 2050. Australia and France
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some vary varied in the first two decades, but a steady upward
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. Germany counted around 9
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in
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1950 and since
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rose up to 2050 despite some
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downward trend in 1990. Japan stood out to be the only country that never saw has seen a downward trend since 1950 and it is predicted to have more than 35
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of senior citizens in 2050.
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