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The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.

The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.
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The table displays the
number
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 of young
people
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 in the countryside and city who spend their leisure
time
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 in four different types of activities between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 in the past, young
people
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 in urban and rural
areas
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 spent the majority of their
time
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 reading,
while
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 the least numbers were in
photography
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 activities. The same trend was
at the end
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 of the period.
According to
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 the data, in 1990, 61% of
adults
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 in cities spent their free
time
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 reading, in comparison with 21% of
adults
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 who played different kinds of sports.
However
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, young
people
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 who prefer animated games and
photography
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 were 10% and 7% respectively.
On the other hand
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, 71% of youth in rural
areas
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 tend to read in free
time
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 and the second most popular activity was playing at 26%. Animated play outraced
photography
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 by 4%. In 2010, the same trend was followed as 78% of
adults
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 in the city and countryside spent their leisure
time
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 reading, the
number
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 of
adults
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 who played animated in urban
areas
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 stayed the same at 10%,
whereas
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 the
number
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 of
adults
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 who practised
photography
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 experienced an increase to reach 14%, in 2010.
In contrast
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, playing decreased by 8%, in urban
areas
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.
Furthermore
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, 14% of
adults
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 in rural
areas
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 spend most of their
time
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 playing animated and 24% doing
photography
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.
However
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, the
number
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 of young
people
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 who played different types of sport stayed the same at 26% from the past until 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, time, areas, photography, adults with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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