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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
#percentage #australian #exports #countries
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The line graph illustrates the percentage of Australian
exports
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 to Japan, the
Unites
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United
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 States, China, and India between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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, it is evident that the final percentage of
exports
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 to China and India
increase
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increased
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 and to Japan and the USA
decrease
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decreased
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 in 2012 compared to 1990.
According to
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 the data,
it is clear that
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exports
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 to China had a dramatic
rose
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rise
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 between 2008 and 2012. Even though the smallest
exports
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going
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went
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 to
this
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 country in 1990, became the largest
exports
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 going
country
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the country
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 in 2012, which accounted
to
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for
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eight
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an
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times
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eight-times
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 gap. Looking at the data in detail,
exports
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 to
US
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the US
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 decreased over the period, which was recorded from 11% in 1990 to 16% in 2012, approximately.
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,
exports
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 to the US
decrease
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decreased
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 than India’s
exports
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 in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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