"Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed." Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement. Be sure to explain your reasoning with specific examples and evidence from your own experience, observations, or reading.

In the present education system, institutions sometimes dissuade
students
from pursuing
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fields
files
field
in which they are unlikely to succeed. In my point of view, I can only partially agree with the statement. On one hand, education should not aim for success
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accomplishment.
Instead
, the main goal is to discover personal interests and
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,
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and to
further
cultivate
this
passion into
career
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. If
students
are educated to only seek
for
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the ones that they are likely to succeed, it may not align with their values
,
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and
thus
can result in unsatisfactions in later years. It is worth noting,
however
, that institutions are still playing a crucial role in
this
process. They are responsible for guiding
students
in terms of encouraging
students
to pursue personal
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, constantly checking on them to ensure they
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discovering, and
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admonitory if they
are strayed
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during the process .
Students
can be confused and can encounter adversities throughout the process, and
this
is
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teachers and other
guiders
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should step into and assist.
To sum up
, institutions should not influence
students
' choice
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future study based on the possibility of
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. It should be rather
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based on personal interest. Yet educators are
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still
responsible for
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guidances
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and opinions, even warnings to ensure
students
are choosing the ones
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that aligns
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with their values.
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