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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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These two charts illustrate the amount of
water
use
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 in three sectors around the whole world, and the situation for
water
consumption
 in
Brazil
 and
Congo
.
Overall
,
water
consumption
 in agriculture is the
heighest
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highest
 one among all sectors. Meanwhile, the
water
consumption
in
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by
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 each person in
Brazil
are
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is
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 much higher than
Congo
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in Congo
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. It is clear from the line chart that 600 km3
water
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of water
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 was consumed in agriculture in 1900, which was the
heighest
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highest
 one. After
expercienced
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experienced
 an upward trend, that figure went up to 2900 km3 in 2000.
Moreover
,
water
 demands in industrial was the second one over the 100 years, from almost 0 km3 to 1100 km3.
However
, there
were
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fewer
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water
 used
in domestic
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, compared to the others, with 0 km3 in 1900 and less than 400 km3 in 2000.
Additionally
, there was a different
water
consumption
 pattern between
Brazil
 and
Congo
. In
Brazil
, there
was
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 176 million people in 2000,
while
 that figure for
Congo
 was only 5.2 million.
Apat
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Apart
 from that, the total space of irrigated land in
Brazil
 was still much higher than
Congo
, with 26500 km2 and 100 km2 respectively.
Furthermore
, each individual in
Brazil
costed
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cost
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 359 m3
water
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of water
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on averagely
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averagely
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 in 2000,
while
 that figure for
Congo
 was only 8 m3.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, brazil, congo, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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