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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Contained in two illustrations is information pertaining to the wage comparison between 5 distinct careers in the United Kingdom and the approximate
hours
 at work
of
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 these fields. From an observational perspective, it can be seen that every job's salary increased after three years at work with the exception of police.
Additionally
,
teacher
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teachers
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 and
firefighter
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firefighters
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 experienced the longest working duration
while
 it is subway
operator
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operators
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that
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apply
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witnessed the shortest working period. Regarding the bar chart,
underground
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the underground
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 driver is the most profitable profession with 50000
pounds
 for starting income and a rose by a
thoundsand
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thousand
pounds
 in the next 3 years. Following up was firefighter and teacher with an increase from 40000
pounds
 and 33000
pounds
 to 42000
pounds
 and 35000
pounds
 respectively.
Similarly
,
nurse
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nurses
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 saw a slight rise from around 17000
pounds
 to exactly 20000
pounds
.
In contrast
, law enforcer's
earning
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earnings
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 remained intact throughout the 3-year period. Turning to the table, the same working
hours
 per week can be
obserbed
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observed
 in
teacher
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teachers
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 and
firefighter
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firefighters
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 with 55
hours
 long. Police duty
last
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 for 40
hours
 weekly which is 2
hours
 longer than that of
nurse
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a nurse
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.
Lastly
, underground driver has the
least
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lowest
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 working
hours
, at 36
hours
 per week.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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