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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given bar chart provides information on the total number of phone calls per
minutes
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minute
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 in the UK. These
calla
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callas
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 are divided into three major categories including local fixed
line
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lines
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, National and International fixed
line
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lines
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, and
Mobiles
. Throughout the period of 1995 to 2002.
Overall
, it
notable
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 that
Mobiles
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mobile
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 calls and
National
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the National
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 fixed
line
 experienced an upward trend throughout the
years
 from 1995 to 2002.
Conversely
, Local showed a downward trend. As illustrated,
Local
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the Local
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 fixed
line
 in 1995 experienced a
siginficant
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significant
 increase before dropping down nearly 70
minutes
 in 2002, peaking at 90
minutes
 in 1999.
In contrast
, National and international fixed
line
 and
Mobiles
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mobile
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 calls, which
have
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apply
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rose across the
years
 from 1995 to 2002, peaking at approximately 60 and 40
minutes
, respectively. In conclusion, It is evident that
Mobiles
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mobile
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 calls and
National
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the National
show examples
 fixed
line
 experienced a growth throughout the
years
 from 1995 to 2002.
While
,
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apply
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 Local showed gradually fall during the
years
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line, mobiles, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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