The line graph provides information about the number of the use of products in covert industry, namely, timber, paper and pulp in Europen country between 1980 nad 2000

The line graph provides information about the number of the use of products in covert industry, namely, timber, paper and pulp in Europen country between 1980 nad 2000
The line graph provides information about the number of the use of products in covert industry, namely, timber, paper and
pulp
in Europen
country
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between 1980
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and
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nad
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and
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2000
Overall
, that of production of
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commodity in Europen country and the trend of timber showed the highest rate in 1985 than other products
while
the level of
pulp
experienced the biggest figure than paper and the result of published falling trends in 1985
According to
the graph, that of
pulp
started from at 6
million
tonnes
in 1980. And
this
result increased significantly and reached
to
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7
mln
tonnes
in 1985. And there was a gradual increase of
tonnes
in
pulp
to 8
million
tonnes
in 1990. And
this
level increase rise until 2000 year and showed at 10
mln
.
tonnes
. Previously the conclusion of timber at 5
mln
tonnes
in 1980. And
this
grew sharply and published at 10
million
tonnes
in 1985. But, there was decreased considerably to 8
mln
tonnes
in 1990.
Then
,
this
conclusion a steady fell to 7,5
million
tonnes
in 2000.
Initally
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Initially
, the epitome of paper started from at 4
million
tonnes
in 1980. And
this
a steep grow
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