The diagrams below show the life circle of a species of large fish called the salmon Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictures
demonstrates
Change the verb form
demonstrate
a
Correct article usage
the
llife
circulation of a species of fish, namely salmon. Correct your spelling
life
Overall
, it is clear that
it goes to the open sea after being matured halfway in the river
, it
returns back to the Correct word choice
and it
river
for reproduction.
Initially
, The process starts in the upper river
where adult salmons lay their eggs under some small stones located between the reeds for nearly 5 to 6 months. After the eggs turned into fries, they would swim to the lower river
and stay them for approximatly
4 years. Growing Correct your spelling
approximately
further
about 7-9 cm, they turn into smolts and migrate to the open sea.
As the third step, they stay in the sea for 5 years before becoming adult salmons and then
, swims
back to the lower Correct subject-verb agreement
swim
river
. Importantly, the adult salmon is more than 5 times bigger than fries. For the last
stage of their lives, they would have their eggs between the reeds.Submitted by bita.rezaei7052 on
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