The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. Describe the information presented below. Comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. Describe the information presented below. Comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
The bar chart illustrates
comparison
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a comparison
the comparison
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between married women and married
men
in the average
hours
of unpaid work each week.
Overall
, it can be seen
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that
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the maximum unpaid work
hours
was done for married
men
.
Their
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is a
sagnificant deffirence
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significant difference
between males and females in all given categories. The average
hours
that
men
without any child
works
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work
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without
paid
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pay
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was 30
hours
.
Moreover
, it rose to just over 50
hours
if they had one or two kids .
Men
with more than three children
they
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apply
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work 60
houre
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hours
hour
without money.
One
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the other hand , we can
notic
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notice
from the chart that
their
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there
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is no huge
differince
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difference
in
women
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women's
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data .
In
addition
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addition,
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their
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there
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is
aslight
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a slight
slight
decline in unpaid time
depenet
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dependent
depend
depends
on the number of kids .
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