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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given bar chart illustrates information about the figure of functional
illiteracy
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 crowd separated into two genders in six different areas around the world in the previous year. The units are in per cent.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the number of
men
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 who were illiterate was always smaller than the one of women. It should
also
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 be noted how South Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
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 had the number of illiterateness people over half of the total population. Regards to the regions which had a proportion of both genders who were functionally
illiteracy
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 under 30, Developed countries had only approximately 2% of gentlemen and 4% of women who were illiterateness,
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 the percentages were exactly 10% for
men
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 and 12% for women in Carribean region.
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, the total of illiterateness
men
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 in East
Asia
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 was smaller about 2% and that of females was almost doubled in comparison with the Latin American area. Focusing on the regions the total functional
illiteracy
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 people is more than 50% of the population, and the sum of
men
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 who were illiterate was more than 30% in Sarahan Africa and under 30% in the Arab States
while
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 that in South
Asia
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 was about 35%.
Moreover
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, the proportion of female functional
illiteracy
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 in Sarahan, Arab and South
Asia
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 was 48, 52 and 56, leading to the undeniable fact that South
Asia
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 was the region where the rest of the community did not know how to read.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, men, asia with synonyms.
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