The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The
given
pie charts illustrate the online shopping sales percentages for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Verb problem
apply
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that travel
had become the most-selling item in prior
year Add an article
the prior
while
film/music overtook the position in 2013.
In 2003, travel
led the coverage, accounting for 36%, while
clothes quite
popular items and made up at just below Add a missing verb
were quite
one-fourt
. Correct your spelling
one-fourth
Moreover
, film/music started slightly lower than in 2013, which stood at 21%. Books became the least buying item from the customers which accounted for 19%.
Regarding following
decade, Correct article usage
the following
travel
, which formerly led the position saw a moderate decline by
7% which precisely accounted for 29%. Meanwhile, film/music had Change preposition
of
overtook
Change the verb form
overtaken
travel
for the first position, gathering 33%. Furthermore
, books had a slight rise to 22%, while
clothes dropped significantly to 16% made
Wrong verb form
making
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
as
the least popular item in Change preposition
apply
market
by the end of the period.Add an article
the market
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