ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
A glance at the pie chart provided reveals how much
money
British students spent per month
in
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different categories of items,
along with
their income sources in 2016.
Overall
, it is evident that student
loan
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loans
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, family and part-time
job
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jobs
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were the major sources of student income,
which
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apply
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the majority part of
those
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which
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was spent
in
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rent.
While
most students decided to
moved
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out from home when they
attend
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college, not surprisingly, half of their expenditure was used to pay for their rent. Second in terms of expenditure was food, the amount spent was only one-third of rental expense, at 124
Euro dollars
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Eurodollars
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.
Money
spent on socialising, travelling and bills had
a moderate levels
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a moderate level
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between 52 Euro to 69 Euro. With regard to the sources of
money
,
although
80% of undergraduates had student loans, the
money
couldn't cover all of their expenses.
As a result
, one in seven students needed to either get financial support from their family or find a part-time job.
On the other hand
, the data provided reflected that less than half of undergraduates had previously had a saving habit. During the year in
question
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approximately 40% of pupils were qualified to get financial
aids
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aid
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.
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