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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
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contained in the given line graph is the
quatity
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quantity
quality
 of
books
 borrowed from June to September
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whilst
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 the pie chart
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 the proportion of distinct types of
books
 in 2014. In general, the most noticeable changes were the increase of three
books
 namely West Eaton, Church Mount and Sutton Wood with the exception of Rye Slip.
Additionally
, Fiction
books
 accounted for the majority of
books
 borrowed. Beginning with the line graph in June when there was the same data of West Eaton and Church Mount with 50
books
 borrowed. These were followed by a significant growth to 150
books
 in
september
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September
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. Meanwhile, Rye Slip dropped
down
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dramatically from 300
books
 to approximately 170
books
. In terms of Sutton Wood, there was an increase from June to July before declining gradually to 100
books
 in August and it
then
 surged to 300
books
 that hold the lion's share. Moving onto the pie chart, it is apparent that the most popular type of
books
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 was Fiction
book
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 with 45%,
whereas
 there was just 19% for Biography
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books
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.
Furthermore
, Science and History
book
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books
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 had the same percentage with 14% and the most unpopular
book
 was
Self - help
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Selfhelp
 with 10%.
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