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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach in teaching?

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In ancient
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, teachers used to teach
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 of the scholars in classrooms with face-to-face methods. In
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, using new devices for teaching their trainees
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 not
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 as compared to physical attendance in the classrooms.
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 essay will discuss both
advantages
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 and disadvantages of traditional and using up-to-date gadgets. On the one hand, in the olden
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, for
undergraduates
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undergraduates,
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 it was compulsory for all they must be present in the
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 they can ask any question from the teacher during the lecture period. Another reason is that they can discuss questions and answers with their peers and do group discussions.
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 in the classrooms, they concentrate 100% on the lecture.
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, in India, most of the graduates
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study
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 methods, pupil lives in Guru Kula and learn
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 management and learning techniques.
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, it is evident these teenagers have more concentration powers to
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 long hours and give better results.
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, the trend of using new technology is increasing
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due to
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 affordability. The primary reason is that people can attend
classes
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 anywhere in the world with these smart devices. Nowadays, graduates are attending
classes
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 via these desktops and they are able to store huge data in their hard disk drives
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 it is easier to access
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time
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. Another factor is that
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equipments
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equipment
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save
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 lots of
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,
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 as travel
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 and usage of transport; it saves environment and sound pollution.
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, teenagers who live in remote areas , where advanced
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 only
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 laptops and mobile phones help them to access
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 meetings, where they send and receive data over the Internet.
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 as people save
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 and utilize that free
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 for other tasks. In conclusion, it cannot be undeniable latest gadgets always save
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 but we lose our culture and
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classes
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, where we
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 our classmates to get ideas about
study
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 and career advice.
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, it is predicted that both ways of
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 are going to continue in the future as well.

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task achievement
Your essay does well to introduce the topic and address the question. However, work on ensuring that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that this idea is well-supported with relevant examples. For instance, when you discuss the advantages of digital technology, you might include specific studies or data to support your points.
coherence cohesion
The essay benefits from a logical structure and clear organization. However, aim to improve the transition between points to make the reading experience smoother. Phrases such as 'Moreover,' 'Additionally,' and 'Conversely' can help guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Try to be consistent in your tenses and make sure to proofread your work to eliminate minor grammatical errors. Additionally, aim to vary your sentence structure for greater coherence and readability.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly sets the stage for the discussion and the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points.
task achievement
The essay covers both the advantages and disadvantages of using traditional methods and modern technology, providing a balanced view.

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