The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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graph

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the online shopping expenditure for retail in the following sectors: (Travel, film\music, books and clothes) in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

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, it is obvious from the graphs that in 2003

people

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travelled more than they did in 2013.

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, in 2013 it seems

people

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liked music and movies more.

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with, looking at the pie of 2003, travel took the top sales by 36%.

People

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were not interested in reading books which made up for 19% only. shopping for outwear accounted for 24% followed by tickets for music festivals and movies by 21%

repectively

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respectively

. The chart of 2013 showed an interesting increase for the film and music sector, the

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percentage

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from 21% to 33%. Meanwhile,

people

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bought

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clothes in 2013

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to 2003 by 8%. Followed by travel which went down to 29%.

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to that, there was a slight increase in buying books by 19%

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

156 words

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