The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The
pies
graph Change the noun form
pie
illustrate
the online shopping expenditure for retail in the following sectors: (Travel, film\music, books and clothes) in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrates
Overall
, it is obvious from the graphs that in 2003 people
travelled more than they did in 2013. However
, in 2013 it seems people
liked music and movies more.
To begin
with, looking at the pie of 2003, travel took the top sales by 36%. People
were not interested in reading books which made up for 19% only. shopping for outwear accounted for 24% followed by tickets for music festivals and movies by 21% repectively
.
The chart of 2013 showed an interesting increase for the film and music sector, the Correct your spelling
respectively
perecentage
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percentage
growed
from 21% to 33%. Meanwhile, Correct your spelling
grew
people
bought less
clothes in 2013 Change the quantifier
fewer
comparing
to 2003 by 8%. Followed by travel which went down to 29%. Wrong verb form
compared
In addition
to that, there was a slight increase in buying books by 19%Submitted by a-la-a-11 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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