the chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

the chart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
the given
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pie charts illustrate the percentage of
the
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water
that is
consumed for various
purpose
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purposes
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by six
countries
.
overall
, the percentage is divided based on the three categories that are industrial
use
,
agriculture
use
and domestic
use
. The four
countries
are highly consuming
water
for
agriculture
among six
countries
. The consumption of the
water
is least for domestic usage in all six
countries
.
firstly
, Central Asia
is consumed
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consumes
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more amount of
water
for agricultural
purposes
with
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at
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88% and
other
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for other
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two
purposes
are less than 10% of consumption. The high utilization of
water
for
agriculture
from
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ranges between 80-85% are two
countries
that are Africa and South Asia which are 84% and 81% respectively.
However
,
other
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the other
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two
purpose
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purposes
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are less than 15% in both cities.
Furthermore
,
the
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South America utilizes
high
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a high
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amount of
water
in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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sector with 71%, 19% in domestic
use
and 10% in industrial
use
.
In contrast
, Europe and North America
are highly
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are highly using
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use
the
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apply
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water
in
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for
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Industry
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Industrial
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purposes
with 53% and 48%
Whereas
one
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a
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forth
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fourth
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of the
water
for
agriculture
and less than 15% of
water
for domestic
purposes
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, countries, use, agriculture, purposes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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