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The line graph illustrates the percentage of audiences in UK who listen to radio and watch TV during the day from October to December 1992

The line graph illustrates the percentage of audiences in UK who listen to radio and watch TV during the day from October to December 1992
The line chart depicts the proportion of British audiences who listened to the radio and watched
TV
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 during the
time
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 between October and December
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1992.
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,
it is clear that
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 people preferred watching
TV
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 programs to listening to the radio
in
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 that
time
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.
However
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, in the
time
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 between 7:00 to 13:00, people were more likely to turn on their radios rather than turn on their TVs. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that the population of watching
TV
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 was growing dramatically from 1:00 to 20:00, and it reached its peak at about 20:00.
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, it went down suddenly. At around 2:00, the number was the lowest in a day. The radio listeners' number was quite different compared to the
TV
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 watchers. At the very beginning, the trend was very flat, but at approximately 6:00, it increased remarkably. In the following
time
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, the figures of listeners declined steadily.

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