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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
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Illustrating in two graphics is information comparing the proportion of the
book
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 that
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 borrowed in terms of categories from four distinct village libraries between June and September and the
amount
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 of
books
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 these libraries lend during the same time period. From an observational perspective, fiction
books
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 were the most favorable among readers
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 the opposite was true for self-help materials.
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, West Eaton, Sutton Wood and Church Mount witnessed an upward trend
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 Ryeslip experienced a downward trend. Regarding the pie chart, fiction
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 dominated other sections with 43% which is almost 2 times greater than that of biography
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 (19%). Following up
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 history and science
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, both of them saw an equality in the rate of borrowing with 14% each.
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, only 10% of the public
borrow
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 self-help
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. Turning to the line graph, Sutton Wood started at 250
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 in June before increasing slightly by 25
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 in the next month.During the
last
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 2 months, the number of
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 borrowed for Sutton Wood dropped significantly to 100
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 but rapidly rose and reached its peak at 300
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.
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, both Church Mount and West Easton stood at exactly 50
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 in June and climbed up to 150
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 in September.
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, there was a continuous decrease in Ryeslip’s figures, from 300
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 to just above 150
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at the end
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 of the timeframe.
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