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Nuclear power is far too dangerous, therefore, countries should ban its use and concentrate instead on developing alternative sources such as hydroelectric power and solar energy.to what extent do you agree.

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The usage of nuclear
power
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 in nations has to be stopped because of its danger, and the countries ought to focus on the renewable
energies productions
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energy production
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 from
sun
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the sun
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 and water. I strongly agree with
this
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 statement
because of
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for
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 some reasons. On the one hand, I believe that nuclear
power
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plant
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plants
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 must be closed and their activities must be banned because of the danger of
this
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energy
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.
To begin
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 with, the country
who
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that
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 has the
power
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 to produce
the
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apply
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nuclear
power
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 counts as a threat to
the
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apply
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other nations.
This
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energy
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 could be used as a destructive weapon with
high
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a high
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 rate of fatality
,
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 and imposes fake strength
to
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on
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 the government
who
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that
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 rules the nation.
As a result
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,
the
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disasters
such
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 as killing thousands of human beings using a nuclear bomb might
be happened
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happen
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 because of
the
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political issues.
Besides
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, nuclear
energy
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 has caused several environmental problems. It has numerous side effects and has
negative
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a negative
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 impact on
the
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apply
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nature like
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a decreases
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decreases
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decrease
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 the soil quality or contaminants the water, and at least one hundred
year
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years
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needs
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need
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 for these damages to
be disappeared
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disappear
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.
For instance
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, after the
Chernobil
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Chernobyl
 nuclear
power
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 plant explosion in
Russian
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Russia
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 the large number of farming lands located near
th
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the
 factory were ruined completely.
On the other hand
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, trying to produce
energy
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 from natural sources is safer. The renewable energies are considered as an eco-friendly
energy
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 or green
energy
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. In the process of generating
power
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 from
sun
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the sun
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, wind or water a small amount of
wastes
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waste
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is
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usually
remained
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, and the remaining
wastes
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waste
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are
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is
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 not harmful to
the
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nature. Little by little the majority of environmental
pollutions
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pollution
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 might be dissolved.
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, these kinds of energies are more accessible to the public and they often do not need enormous and modern factories. Their technologies are somehow simple and easy to use.
The ordinary
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 people can have a solar panel on their roof in order to generate electricity
power
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, or a simple hydroelectric factory in coastal cities can produce
sufficient
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a sufficient
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 amount of light for the town. In conclusion, nuclear
energy
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 could be so dangerous not only for the human beings
,
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 but
also
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 for our planet. In my point of view, nations should concentrate more on natural resources as
an
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alternative
energy
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not
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, not
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the
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apply
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nuclear
power
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.

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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
You have responded to the task adequately, with relevant points and arguments discussed on both sides of the issue.
task achievement
You have provided specific examples to support your points, such as the Chernobyl disaster.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • radioactive contamination
  • meltdown
  • sustainable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • renewable resources
  • fission process
  • energy grid
  • hazardous waste
  • decommissioning
  • safety protocols
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