The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 

2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and 

the charts show how it was distributed. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams above show information about the
police
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financial management in the UK between 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, the sum of
police
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income
were
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rise
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and spent mostly on their employees.
According to
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the table, The Government played a significant role in supporting the
police
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financial
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,
gave
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them slightly above 175
million
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pound
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pounds
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sterling in 2017 followed
up
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by
the
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local taxes and other sources by above ninety
million
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pound
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sterling and 38
million
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pound
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sterling, respectively.
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, in 2018, there
were
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a lot of
rose
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raised
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budget for the
police
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.
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, the budget
comes
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from the National Government had
rise
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by approximately two
million
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as well as
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the local taxes which rose by 11,1
million
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pound
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pounds
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sterling.
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hand
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the other sources rose a little by half a
million
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pound
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pounds
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sterling. The money
of
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the UK
police
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had
at
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in
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these years must
be distribute
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be distributed
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properly,
therefore
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, in both years they spent mostly on paying the
employees
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employee's
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payroll, particularly for their officers and staff.
Moreover
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, they chose to
maintained
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the facilities
such
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as buildings and vehicles by spending eight per cent in 2017 and fourteen per cent in 2018 .
Lastly
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, they selected
to upgrade in
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technology as the
the
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least
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last
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option.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words police, million, pound with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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