The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams above show information about the
police
financial management in the UK between 2017 and 2018. Use synonyms
Overall
, the sum of Linking Words
police
income Use synonyms
were
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was
rise
and spent mostly on their employees.
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the rise
According to
the table, The Government played a significant role in supporting the Linking Words
police
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financial
, Replace the word
finances
gave
them slightly above 175 Wrong verb form
giving
million
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pound
sterling in 2017 followed Fix the agreement mistake
pounds
up
by Change preposition
apply
the
local taxes and other sources by above ninety Correct article usage
apply
million
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pound
sterling and 38 Fix the agreement mistake
pounds
million
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pound
sterling, respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
pounds
Furthermore
, in 2018, there Linking Words
were
a lot of Change the verb form
was
rose
budget for the Correct your spelling
raised
police
. Use synonyms
For example
, the budget Linking Words
comes
from the National Government had Verb problem
apply
rise
by approximately two Change the verb form
risen
million
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as well as
the local taxes which rose by 11,1 Linking Words
million
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pound
sterling. Fix the agreement mistake
pounds
On the other
Linking Words
hand
the other sources rose a little by half a Add a comma
hand,
million
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pound
sterling.
The money Fix the agreement mistake
pounds
of
the UK Change preposition
apply
police
had Use synonyms
at
these years must Change preposition
in
be distribute
properly, Change the verb form
be distributed
therefore
, in both years they spent mostly on paying the Linking Words
employees
payroll, particularly for their officers and staff. Change noun form
employee's
employees'
Moreover
, they chose to Linking Words
maintained
the facilities Change the verb
maintain
such
as buildings and vehicles by spending eight per cent in 2017 and fourteen per cent in 2018 . Linking Words
Lastly
, they selected Linking Words
to upgrade in
technology as the Change the verb form
upgrading
the
Remove the redundancy
apply
least
option.Correct your spelling
last
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, million, pound with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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