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You have just been offered a place on a short training course in a small seaside town where a friend of yours is living. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: 1. Greet your friend and tell your friend the good news 2. Ask your friend about life in the seaside town 3. Arrange a time to meet your friend before you start the course

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I hope you're doing well, i'am
exicited
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excited
 to inform you that
i
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 will move to your
seasise
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seaside
 because there is something
i
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I
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 have to do there. how are you? long time no see after
graduate
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graduating
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 from University.
i
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I
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 would like to tell you some information regarding of training that I will do in your hometown next week on
sunday
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Sunday
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.
therefore
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,
i
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I
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 want to know about how to
life
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live
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in
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on
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 a small seaside which I have never
gone
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been
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 there, and
this
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 is my first time
to live
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living
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in
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on
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seaside
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the seaside
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.
that is
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 why have to know some information about
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the atmosphere
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atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 and network
that is
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 very crucial for me who is always
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needed
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need
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needed
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 for working. when I arrive might be
arround
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around
at
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apply
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07 pm, I
decide
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decided
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 to meet with you first as I don't know the directions and require
to
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you to
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 guide me
arround
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around
 there. We can meet at
Airport
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the Airport
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 before going
to
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anywhere that you want to invite me. Thank you so much. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon Your Sircenly Taufiq

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coherence cohesion
Work on improving sentence structures and grammar to make the letter more coherent.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific details about your training course to make your purpose clearer.
suitable writing tone
The letter conveys your excitement and intention to meet your friend effectively.
complete response
You have organized the letter in a way that covers all required points.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exciting opportunity
  • thrilled to inform you
  • training course
  • seaside town
  • living experience
  • local attractions
  • facilities
  • weather conditions
  • convenient time
  • catch up
  • before the course starts
  • can't wait to see you
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