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The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart compares how many male and female staff worked in the UK in 1998 and 2012, divided into full-time and part-time.
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 the number of men (full-time) consistently had the highest workforce.
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 (part-time) was the lowest in each year. In 1988, the proportion of men (full-time) started at 53% after which it experienced a gradual decrease to 47% in 2012. Similar changes can be seen in the number of women who do part-time jobs. These figures declined slightly from 22% to 20% in 2012. 1.550.000 male staff part-time jobs in 1998 in the UK, with a subsequent significant rise to 2.131.000 staff in 2012. These changes can be seen in the number of women in full-time jobs. These figures witnessed a considerable rise from 4.482.000 to 7.696.000 in 2012.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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