The table below shows how many students of a school in UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features, comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how many students of a school in UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features, comparisons where relevant.
The given table depicts the
quantity
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number
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of pupils in one particular school in the UK
which
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who
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were involved in
such
sports activities as running, basketball swimming and football (
also
renowned as soccer) during a time period from 2001 to 2011 As it might be concluded from the provided data, between 2001 and 2011 ,there were fluctuations in all sport types.
Nonetheless
, the most obvious one
occured
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occurred
occurs
in 2001 and eventually finished only 6 years later, the sport type that underwent the fluctuations in the number of sportsmen was football.
Furthermore
, there was a sharp plunge
of
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in
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school basketball players in 2006,
however
, at the same time as the
quantity
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of basketball players sharply went down, students had a tendency to become runners,
their
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number increased drastically by 2007. Delving into more details, it has to be mentioned that after a sharp uplift of runners (from approximately 19 runners to 60), their
quanity
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quantity
quality
did not alter at all by the end of
the
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2011.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • year-on-year comparison
  • peak
  • lowest point
  • gender distribution
  • new entrants
  • drop in participation
  • continuation/discontinuation
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