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Thw chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summeruse the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevent.

Thw chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summeruse the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevent.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the frequency of people eating junk food in
the
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American restaurants in three years between the years 2003, 2006 and 2013.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 individuals mostly eat
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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 diet once a
week
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 or 1-2
times
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 a
month
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;
however
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, there are a few people eating
this
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 type of food every day or never had it before.
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 with, in 2003, both the 1 time
week
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 and 1-2
times
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 a
month
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 groups had almost the same percentage which were 31% and 30% respectively. The final place
in
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this
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year
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 was the everyday
group
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 which occupied a meagre 5%.
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, in 2006, the fraction of once a
week
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 shot up by 3%
while
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 1-2
times
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 a
month
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 declined to exactly 25%;
besides
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, the
last
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group
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 still was for people who ate it
everyday
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, at a minuscule 3%. What is interesting to note is the 2003 never
group
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 was less than the 1-2
times
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 per
month
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 by 6
times
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.
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, in the final
year
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 of record, the 1-2
times
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 per
month
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 surged to a gigantic 33% whilst the once a
week
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 went down by 5%.
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, the everyday
group
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 remained constant
in
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this
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year
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. What is surprising to see is citizens who ate fast food several
time
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times
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 and a few
times
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 a
year
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 were nearly the same, at 15%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, times, month, year, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food restaurant
  • Frequency
  • Consumption
  • Decadal change
  • Trend analysis
  • Peak years
  • Demographics
  • Eating out
  • Health trends
  • Economic conditions
  • Food industry
  • Demographic segmentation
  • Cuisine
  • Independent outlets
  • Chain restaurants
  • Longitudinal study
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