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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 be four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 be four different modes of transport.
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The provided line graph illustrates the supply of
goods
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 transported in the United Kingdom from 1974 to 2002 via road, water, rail and pipeline.
Overall
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, road and water transportation carried more
goods
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 in the UK than compared to the amount carried by pipelines and rails.
According to
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 the given line graph,
initially
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, in 1974, the
goods
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 carried on the road
was
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were
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 70
million
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tonnes
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 and it fluctuated in
certain
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a certain
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 period .
However
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, it
was
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reached more than 90
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002. The water transport was highly used from 1982 to 1994. In 1998, it was dropped down and
finally
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 reached over 60
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
Moreover
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, the use of
rail
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the rail
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 system for carrying
goods
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 to the UK
got
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was
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 reduced
whereas
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 less quantity
were
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was
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 transported
in
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by
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 rails later year but
finally
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, it
was
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reached 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
Furthermore
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, the pipeline had different statistics. In 1974, it was exactly 5
million
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tonnes
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 and it started slowly increasing
extend
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 to 19
million
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tonnes
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 in 1992. over a year, it increased
nearly
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by nearly
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 3
million
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tonnes
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 and stayed plateau for 8 years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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