The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
gives
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information about the proportion of
men
and women which they
workers
in
country
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countries
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A and
B
.
Overall
, the charts illustrated three categories
that
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namely industry,
service
and
agriculture
in countries A and
B
. It is
that
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clear
country
B
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B's
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service
of female
workers
was the
hightest
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highest
percentage
in contrast
country
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B
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B's
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agriculture
of female
worker
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workers
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was
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the lowest proportion. Now
turnin
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to details . In
country
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country,
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A Female
workers
in
service
made by nuder half per
cen
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cent
while
mela
workers
in
service
was
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56%
moreover
the male
workers
in industry was quarter percentage
whereas
female
workers
was
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less than
men
just under ten per
cent
.
However
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the
per
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percentage
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cent
of female
workers
in
agriculture
was 43% in
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contrast
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mela
workers
in
agriculture
accounted for
nuder
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under
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thirty
protion
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per cent
. On
other
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hand , in
country
B
the
pre
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percentage
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cent
of
men
which they work in
agriculture
was double
than
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the
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that
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of female
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female
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females
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in addition
in industry of
men
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male
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workers
was above 30 %
while
the women
was
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were
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nuder
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under
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ten per
cent
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, workers, country, b, service, agriculture, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • gender employment rate
  • workforce
  • disparity
  • employment trend
  • notable difference
  • counterpart
  • demographic
  • labor market
  • sector
  • predominantly
  • employment rate
  • analysis
  • comparative study
  • statistical data
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