The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
gives
information about the proportion of Change the verb form
give
men
and women which they workers
in country
A and Fix the agreement mistake
countries
B
.
Overall
, the charts illustrated three categories that
namely industry, Correct pronoun usage
apply
service
and agriculture
in countries A and B
. It is that
clear Correct determiner usage
apply
country
B
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B's
service
of female workers
was the hightest
percentage Correct your spelling
highest
in contrast
country
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to country
B
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B's
agriculture
of female worker
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workers
was
the lowest proportion.
Now Verb problem
had
turnin
to details . In Correct your spelling
turn
country
A Female Add a comma
country,
workers
in service
made by nuder half per cen
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cent
while
mela workers
in service
was
56% Change the verb form
were
moreover
the male workers
in industry was quarter percentage whereas
female workers
was
less than Change the verb form
were
men
just under ten per cent
.However
the Add a comma
However,
per
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percentage
cent
of female workers
in agriculture
was 43% in contrary
mela Correct your spelling
contrast
workers
in agriculture
accounted for nuder
thirty Correct your spelling
under
protion
.
On Correct your spelling
per cent
other
hand , in Correct article usage
the other
country
B
the pre
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percentage
cent
of men
which they work in agriculture
was double than
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apply
the
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that
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of female
female
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females
in addition
in industry of men
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male
workers
was above 30 % while
the women was
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were
nuder
ten per Correct your spelling
under
cent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, workers, country, b, service, agriculture, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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