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the graph below shows electricity production( in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012

the graph below shows electricity production( in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012
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The line graph illustrates
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 production by Thermal, Nuclear, Hydroelectric, and Renewables in France from 1980 to 2012. In these 32 years, nuclear has a considerable increase,
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 other sources only experienced a slight fluctuation, compared to it. In 1980, thermal stayed in the top position in terms of
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 production, generating 120
terawatt
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hours
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 of
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. Meanwhile nuclear was the second highest, producing around 70
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hours
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, and hydroelectric
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 provided similar quantities.
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, renewables were not used at that time. Between 1980 and 2005,
electricity
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 production from nuclear rose dramatically to a peak of over 425
terawatt
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hours
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.
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, the figure for thermal decreased to only 50
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hours
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 and remained at
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 level for the next 7 years.
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 hydroelectric generation went up and down, it remained stable, at between 50-100
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hours
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. Renewables generation rose slightly after 2000, to approximately 25
terawatt
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hours
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 in 2007.
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