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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information regarding food
consumption
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 (
Rice
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, Wheat,
Maize
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) in
Cambodia
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,
Poland
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, Egypt, and
Mexico
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. The unit measurements are
calories
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 per person per
day
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Cambodia
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 has the highest
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number of
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rice
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consumption
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,
while
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Poland
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 has the lowest figures for
maize
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consumption
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.
People
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 in
Cambodia
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 consume 1445
calories
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 of
rice
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 each
day
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. Egypt,
on the other hand
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, has the second-highest number of
rice
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 eaten by
people
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 501
calories
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.
While
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Poland
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 has the lowest calorie
consumption
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 of 19 per
day
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.
People
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 in
Mexico
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 eat only 57
calories
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 per
day
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. Moving to wheat, Egyptians eat 1059
calories
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 per
day
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 which is the highest among other countries, followed by
Poland
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 at 865 per
day
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.
Mexico
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 comes in third place with 275
calories
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 that
people
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 eat of food made from wheat.
By contrast
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,
Cambodia
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 has the lowest floor
consumption
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 of 18
calories
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 each
day
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 for one person.
Furthermore
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,
Maize
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 is popular in
Mexico
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 as
people
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 eat 1083
calories
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 per
day
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, and Egyptian
people
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 have 578
calories
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 per
day
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.
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 that cambodies consume 103
calories
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 of
maize
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 every
day
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.
However
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, no one in
Poland
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 eats
maize
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, rice, maize, cambodia, poland, mexico, calories, day, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • staples
  • dietary preferences
  • agricultural output
  • nutritional intake
  • per capita
  • predominant
  • subsistence crops
  • culinary habits
  • food security
  • statistical overview
  • consumption patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • domestic production
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