The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children's sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.

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The first presented graph illustrates a snapshot of the amount of budget that British families dedicated to children's sports from 2008 to 2014; accompanied by a comparative set of data regarding three popular sports among children in the same time period.

Overall

, the upward trend of expenditure on kids' sports and the popularity of football throughout the years is eye-catching. Looking

into

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the first graph,

it is clear that

the amount of money that households dedicate to children's physical activities starts at a monthly average of 20 pounds in 2008 which went on an ever-increasing trend through the years reaching a high of 35 pounds. The second graph,

on the other hand

, depicts the steady dominance of the popularity of football, with above 7.5

million

participants, compared to athletics and swimming which never passed 5

million

. Athletics' figures fluctuated the most, standing at less than a

million

until 2010 and

then

surging to 5

million

in 2012.

Swiming

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however

, experienced consistent growth in the course time from just under 2.5

million

to almost 5 participants in 2014.

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