The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
pie chart displays the two countries working in three fields,
service
,
argiculture
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agriculture
and industry. It is clear from the graph that
males
and
females
have
diffrent
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different
percentages
on
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the sectors for
the
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both
A and B
Country
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Countries
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.
According to
what is shown,
both
gender
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genders
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in
country
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countries
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A and B
prefere
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prefer
preferred
service
career
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careers
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. To
illustraite
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illustrate
, as shown from the figure, 56% of the
male
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males
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working
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work
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on
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service
while
49% of the
females
.
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Moreover
, 65% of
Males
on
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Country B are working on services too, and 88% of the
females
.
However
,
works
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work
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related to the industrial
males
works higher than the
female
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females
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in
both
countries, which
recorded
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is recorded
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by
males
50% , 32%
while
the
females
8% and 11%.
To sum up
, we could say that
both
countries
as well as
both
gender
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genders
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working
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work
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on
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service
sectors rather than
the
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apply
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other fields.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words service, males, females, both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • gender employment rate
  • workforce
  • disparity
  • employment trend
  • notable difference
  • counterpart
  • demographic
  • labor market
  • sector
  • predominantly
  • employment rate
  • analysis
  • comparative study
  • statistical data
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