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Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable clothes. Therefore, all students have to wear school uniforms. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is sometimes argued that
students
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 should wear
uniforms
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 in schools
instead
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 of usual clothing. I completely agree that learners should have the same
uniforms
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 for
school
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 to increase
fairnessess
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fairness
 among pupils and productivity
os
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of
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school
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 work. There are several reasons why
students
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 should wear
uniforms
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instead
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 of fashionable clothes.
Firstly
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, not all
students
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 have the financial capabilities to buy new clothes for every day. When
students
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 wear the same dress code at
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, they will feel they are the same. Regardless the their social status,
this
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 will result in establishing
a strong bonds
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a strong bond
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 between them.
For example
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, In the United Kingdom, the royal family kids are asked to wear the same
uniforms
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of
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 other
students
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,
all
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and all
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 scholars admit they feel they are the same.
Secondly
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,
students
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 should be
teached
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taught
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 to focus on their education, rather than spend their time
comapring
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comparing
 with each
others
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other's
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 clothes.
Besides
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, it
help
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students
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 concentrate more on
school
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 duties and
activites
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activities
 and not
being
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be
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 distracted
of
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by
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 following the latest fashion trends.
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, wearing
uniforms
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ensure
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ensures
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 that no one will be
judge
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judged
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 based on its
apperance
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appearance
.
In other words
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, teachers will treat all
students
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 as
they
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if they
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 are the same
,
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 because from
uniforms
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 they cannot recognize which
students
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 are wealthy and which are not.
For instance
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,
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school
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schools
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 in the United
Sataes
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States
,
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 does not have
uniform
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a uniform
the uniform
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policy
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policies
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, so
students
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 complain all the time
from
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about
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 the way some teachers
are treating
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treat
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 poor
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.
To conclude
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, I believe that all
students
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 should have the same
uniforms
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 at
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 to ensure everyone is treated fairly, and to
encoursge
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encourage
 them to focus on
school
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 duties without distraction.
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear and relevant introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the argument.
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The response addresses the task effectively, providing reasons for agreeing with the statement and supporting those reasons with explanations and examples.
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The essay discusses multiple aspects of the topic, showing a comprehensive grasp of the arguments in favor of school uniforms.
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