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You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employe. In your letter • remind your employer what the course was about • explain why the course was useful to you in your work • suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other Colleagues

#course #work #employer #feedback #employe #colleagues
Dear Sir or Madam, I'm writing
this
 email regarding your
last
course
 named Introduction in Finance ” that was set in our company
liberary
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library
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 the 6th of October. The
course
 was about the basic skills and tools that I should be aware of as
member
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 of
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the
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Finance Department ”. As well,
the
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 way
which
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in which
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 I can apply
this
knowleadge
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knowledge
 at my workplace. One of the major aspects of our daily work is to be able to deal with
Financial
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the Financial
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 system, and before the
course
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,
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I was avoiding
these kind
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 of
situation
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because simply I had
a
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little background on
such
 a thing.
However
, after your great beneficial
course
, I am sure that I'm able to work well in any Financial topics. I believe that some of the colleagues
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working
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work
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 in
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the
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Marketing Department might not get useful
of
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this
course
 based on their daily tasks. Thank you for your help.   Nouf Regard,
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task achievement
Ensure correct spelling and grammar are used throughout the letter. For instance, 'knowleadge' should be 'knowledge', and 'whose working' should be 'who are working'.
task achievement
Provide more details or examples to strengthen how the course benefited you in your work. This helps in giving a complete response to the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Ensure to use appropriate punctuation and sentence structure. For example, the phrase 'regarding your last course named Introduction in Finance' could be improved to 'regarding the recent course named Introduction to Finance'.
greeting and closing
The closing statement is respectful and professional, which is appropriate for the context.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea and transitions smoothly to the next, making the letter easy to follow.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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